Her Father's Daughter

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Her Father's Daughter

Postby Kakita Shiro » Wed May 17, 2017 7:08 am

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Re: Her Father's Daughter

Postby Doji Makoto » Wed May 17, 2017 8:07 am

Loved it! Don't want to spoil anything, but it was simply great.
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Re: Her Father's Daughter

Postby Kakita Onimaru » Wed May 17, 2017 9:27 am

I liked, but think the writing could use some editing. I'm picky
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Re: Her Father's Daughter

Postby Doji Makoto » Wed May 17, 2017 9:35 am

What bothers me most about the writing is the occasional use of "hai" or "-ue" and things like this.
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Re: Her Father's Daughter

Postby Daidoji Reiji » Wed May 17, 2017 9:35 am

I was hoping to see more differences from Hotaru than Hoturi, and they may come eventually. The fiction itself was fine, I was slightly disappointed all in all. Hopefully she doesn't just end up being a Hoturi clone.
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Re: Her Father's Daughter

Postby MirumotoDaisuke » Wed May 17, 2017 6:56 pm

While we're on the subject, is Hotaru's use of "-dono" appropriate toward Bayushi Kachiko, Imperial Advisor? I thought -dono was reserved specifically for superiors in your own chain
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Postby Daidoji Reiji » Thu May 18, 2017 5:18 am

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Re: Her Father's Daughter

Postby Himoto » Thu May 18, 2017 5:47 am

At least, this story recanonizes two of the big three Imperial-era Crane characters (Toshimoko and Yoshi). Only Uji missing now from the Crane all-stars lineup.

(Okay, and Reju)

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Re: Her Father's Daughter

Postby Daidoji Tacticus » Thu May 18, 2017 6:04 am

Ceterum autem censeo Otomines esse delendam.

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